Showing posts with label headlines. Show all posts
Showing posts with label headlines. Show all posts

Thousands 'to miss out on university degree'

I thought this was a strange BBC News headline:

BBC News article and headline


First, there are two orders of magnitude between "thousands" (headline) and "hundreds of thousands" (body copy). A quick play with Firebug suggests that "Hundreds of thousands 'to miss out on university degree'" would fit - just - as a headline, although I grant you that it's not particularly catchy.

Second, the story isn't that people will miss out on degrees - it's that they will miss out on university places altogether (although one tends to follow the other). To me, the headline as stands suggests that thousands of people currently at university will miss out on a degree. And while that's probably true, it's not reflective of the story.

Headlines: 'Bizarre cricket caught on camera'

The sixth headline in this BBC News 'Most Popular Stories Now' widget confused me briefly:

BBC News widget with bizarre cricket story
Bizarre cricket? Could the Beeb mean Twenty20?

(OK, here's the real story.)

AP headline unleashes emotions

I saw this Associated Press headline on the New York Times website today, and I'm not that keen:

Civilian deaths unleash emotions in Afghanistan

"Civilian deaths unleash emotions in Afghanistan" - which emotions? Awe? Lust? Joy?

Of course not, but it wouldn't hurt to be a bit more specific.

Evening Standard: 'Two women killed and 47 injured on trip to see Christmas lights'

Here's the front page of today's London Evening Standard:



As you can hopefully see, the subhead reads: "TWO WOMEN KILLED AND 47 INJURED ON TRIP TO SEE CHRISTMAS LIGHTS".

This subhead strikes me as strange for two reasons:

  • It seems to suggest that 47 women were injured, when in fact 47 people - men and women - were injured.

  • If two men had been killed, I'm fairly sure the Standard's subhead would have been: "TWO KILLED AND 47 INJURED ON TRIP TO SEE CHRISTMAS LIGHTS".

    So why specify in the subhead that the two people killed were women? Is it somehow more shocking when women are killed than men? Look at it this way: if the two people killed had been children, the Standard would definitely have specified that.


Here's the web version of the story: Coach horror: Driver saved us from worse injuries, say passengers

Ambiguous BBC News headline: 'Children's boss axed after death'

I'm not sure about the BBC News headline 'Children's boss axed after death':

Children's boss axed after death

So first the children's boss died, and then someone hacked at her corpse with an axe? Wait, no - it wasn't her death, and she was only axed metaphorically.

Even changing 'axed' to 'sacked' would have made for a better headline - and it's not as if two extra characters would have caused it to bust.


UPDATE - I've just looked again at the story on the BBC News website and spotted that the headline has been rewritten since I took my original screengrab yesterday:

Salford children's director fired after toddler death
So 'axed' has become 'fired' and 'death' is now qualified with 'toddler'. In addition, 'Children's boss' has become 'Salford children's director'.

Headlines: 'Major massacres'

On Friday, I walked past a folded, discarded copy of Metro and caught the first deck of its two-deck front page headline. It read: "Major massacres".

This left me wondering what massacres it was referring to, and when exactly a massacre became a "major" massacre.

Later, I picked up a copy of Metro for myself and saw the full headline. It was:

Major massacres
11 at top US base

Oops.

Headline: Grant seals return to Portsmouth

Grant seals return to Portsmouth
I first saw this headline out of context - in a giant news ticker in the window of my local Sainsbury's supermarket. It left me wondering what Grant seals were, and why they had abandoned Portsmouth in the first place. Perhaps the water was too polluted?

It was only when I got home and Googled 'Grant seals return to Portsmouth' that I discovered the headline was from a BBC Sport story about Avram Grant's return to Portsmouth FC (as you can probably tell, I'm not much of a football fan).

From the sublime to the Mr Pricklepants

News stories, in print and online, can catch your eye for all sorts of reasons. Absurdity is one of them:


A colleague of mine called me over to his desk just to share this Empire headline (and strapline/standfirst?) with me. I'm glad he did.

We didn't feel any need to read the full story, though.

Headlines: Gordon Brown ordered mission...

R Mason spotted this poorly written headline on the Times Online website:

Times Online screengrab showing amibiguous headline
She writes:

When I first read this, I wondered: why would a mission hold a journalist? Why would Gordon Brown give it orders?


(If you can't see the picture, the headline reads: "Gordon Brown ordered mission to free kidnapped reporter Stephen Farrell")

Ex-minister Blears' car attacked

I didn't know that Hazel Blears' car used to be a cabinet minister:

Screengrab from BBC News website

According to a BBC News story today:

Former cabinet minister Hazel Blears' car has been attacked while she was out canvassing voters.


I wonder whether the car fiddled its expenses. Sorry, I mean her expenses...

Whites searched 'for race balance'. Did they find it?

My first thought on seeing Metro's main front page headline today was: 'So did they find it?'

Metro headline: Whites searched for race balance

As it turns out, 'whites' is the object, not the subject, of the headline (which is written in the passive voice).

(UPDATE 19/07/09: As Garik points out in the comments following this post, 'whites' is actually the subject of this passive sentence.)

The first paragraph of the story clarifies the matter:
Police are searching white people under terror laws simply to provide 'racial balance' to statistics, it was revealed yesterday.


Last year I blogged about police stopping and searching commuters and schoolgirls at my local station...

Headines: 'Pilot recycling scheme under way'

A colleague of mine, Sue, has pointed out this great BBC News headline:



"What do you do with recycled pilots, I wonder?" Sue asks.

Which reminds me of that old saying: "Old pilots never die, they just go to a higher plane..."

Reporter wins Nobel Prize. Sorry, I mean Pulitzer

A bit of confusion in this Wired PR News story between a Pulitzer Prize and a Nobel Prize (as usual, click to see a larger image):

Click to see a larger image

To be fair, Wired PR News spotted its mistake and offered a correction the following day, although the story with its original headline is still up on the site.

(I can't take any credit for this one – I came across it via a tweet by @andybechtel.)

Just for the record, I've never won a Nobel Prize or a Pulitzer Prize. On the other hand, I haven't been laid off yet either.

How to write headlines that make headlines

Today we have a guest post contributed by Katie Wilson, who writes about accreditation for online universities. She welcomes your feedback at KatieWilson06 at gmail.com. Thanks, Katie!

One thing I’ve learned in all my years as a writer is that you either have the flair for the job or you don’t; there are no in-between measures when it comes to weaving magic with words alone.

There are different kinds of writers – some are word perfect at both their grammar and their style, others have a way with words and analogies but are not too concerned with the nitty-gritty of grammar, and yet others are masters of the short and catchy texts – they’re able to write the perfect headlines and great captions for pictures.

The art of writing headlines differs according to the kind of articles you’re writing and the audience you’re writing for.

Earlier, when there were only newspapers to worry about, most headlines focused on news items, so they were pretty straightforward. All they had to do was be concise and encapsulate the news item in a few words. Catchy headlines were sought after for feature stories and pictures, one-liners that were witty, used double meanings, a clever play on words, and which enticed the reader to go through the article. A write-up about exercise could have the headline “Fighting Fat For Fitness”, an alliteration on the letter F adding to the appeal factor here.

So if you’re writing for a newspaper, that’s what you need to be able to do when you write headlines – play it straight and to the point when it’s a news item and go all out with your creativity when it’s a feature item.

Today, the focus is more on blogs and web copy where the emphasis is on search engine optimization, links, and rankings on Google and company. So good headlines need to have one or more of the following characteristics:

  • The keywords that are important to your article
  • A “How-To” list that offers advice
  • A teaser headline that ends with a question, like “What’s so Great about the new iPod?”
  • A “Reasons-Why” list that tells you why you must do this and that
  • A list in general, because lists seem to be doing really well in the rankings on sites like Digg

You don’t have to come up with a headline before you begin the article; in fact, instead of wasting time thinking of a line that would make great copy, start putting down the words in your head and you’ll feel a suitable headline popping in at an opportune moment.

Jade Goody still lives

Something topical for a change on The Engine Room. Gareth wrote in this morning with the following:

Spotted an interesting headline on the front page of the London Lite last night.

The headline, under a big picture of Jade Goody, was "JADE: FEARS JACK IS ABOUT TO BE JAILED".

To which the obvious answer is: "I bet she doesn't, she's been dead for two days."

I know what they were trying to do with this, but I can't help thinking it backfired a bit!

Ah yes, but you forget that Jade Goody still lives – "in the hearts of the people".

Apologies to anyone reading this who has never heard of Jade Goody.

Gordon Brown sorry over assault arrest. Really?

Headline four in this BBC News widget left me wondering who Prime Minister Gordon Brown might have assaulted:



It turns out that the story was about R&B star Chris Brown... but how was I supposed to know that? I imagine that most UK readers would think of 'Gordon' if they saw the name 'Brown' in a web headline.

I may have to add this to my knol on web print versus headlines to illustrate the point the web headlines are often seen out of context.

EU gives shark protection teeth

I was very briefly confused by the bottom headline in this 'Other top stories' widget on the Science & Environment section of the BBC News website:


It left me wondering what 'protection teeth' were, and why the EU would give some to a shark. Surely a shark could protect itself?

Headlines: Row, row, row your Metro

Page 11 of today's Metro contains a "row over bottle of wine" as well as a "row over CCTV in toilets". I know 'X in row over Y' is handy headlinese, but no more than one per spread, please.


Writing web headlines: search and searchability

Just a quick note to say that my second guest post on Pam Robinson's 'Words at Work' blog is now up. It focuses on how to write search-engine-friendly headlines for the web without compromising on quality.

Normal service will be resumed tomorrow...

Writing web headlines: web versus print

Pam Robinson, former news editor at the LA Times, recently asked me to write a guest post on web headlines for her 'Words at Work' blog. I got so carried away that I wrote two - and the first one is up now. It focuses on some of the differences between print and web headlines and the reasons for those differences.

My second post will look at how search considerations influence the writing of web headlines, and all being well I'll have it up by tomorrow evening.

After that, no more moonlighting from me for a while - unless someone pays me well or asks me really nicely!